Colored people were being deterred from being with white women through lynching. White people knew that lynching wasn’t stopping colored people from sleeping with their women and continued any ways. Little did they know, colored people weren’t the only ones playing a part in this, the women also played a part. White women were attracted to colored people. The law was so strict that nothing could be done about this accept keep things a secret and if caught, they would say it was rape. There for I believe that white people contradicted lynching because it wasn’t done to stop the colored people from sleeping with their women as they believed. It clearly showed that it wouldn’t stop from happening no matter what was done to their race. Lynching was done for other personal reasons other then trying to be heard.
Joel, I like your blog and how you gave another perspective on why African Americans where lynch. However the blog was quite confusing and unclear. I had difficulty distinguishing which people played a role in the horrifying crimes committed against “Blacks”. In your topic sentence you weren’t being specific, which color people are you referring to (state ethnicity) and what is their sex. You use the word “lynching” which is a keyword you should define it. In sentence four are you stating facts? If so I suggest you cite the quote so readers are aware your information is factual. In sentence two, who continued the lynching? Was it White woman and men? I don’t fully understand the contradiction it’s kind of unclear, I think you could have demonstrated this better. Your paragraph structure is unorganized you may want to revise this blog to make it less complicated to comprehend.
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ReplyDeleteI like how you give direction to the reader by telling us how African Americans were lynched by sleeping with white women. But I think you should consider introducing the text first and then give the reader some examples from the text. You should revise your context and your grammar. Maybe if you find a quote from the text that could show the reader how African Americans contradicts, by sleeping with white women, and then paraphrasing in your own words. Cite the page as well to show prove of where the quote comes from. Define your keywords, in this case "Lynch". Otherwise I like this blog because it tells us how you use another point of view to explain how African Americans were lynch.
-Carol.
I would like to start by suggesting that you give your readers some more direction in your introduction. For example I suggest that you introduce the texts in your introduction. You also used some vague langue in the second sentence of the first paragraph. You used the term lynching, I suggest that you define your keywords so that readers can understand exactly what you are writing about.
ReplyDeletehey Joel, I like the concise and to-the-point-ness of your blog. I feel like it has potential to be a great argumentative piece based on your information about the concept of personal lives being affected due to hate against Afro-Americans. A sense of direction would help as Amanda said. You clearly addressed the issue which was that White women and Black men were not allowed to be together and that the consequence was indeed a lynching. Another thing I noticed that I really liked was that you acknowledged a contradiction happening within the white community by saying “Therefore I believe that white people contradicted lynching because it wasn’t done to stop the colored people from sleeping with their women as they believed.” Further go into detail about this idea of a contradiction, maybe you could say something about the fact that Black men weren’t allowed to be with white women but white men were allowed to be with Black women, that makes a very powerful argument, in that, where you can argue that the law played such a strict role in the lives of both races but somehow colored folk took the fall. You should DEFINITELY use examples from the text to support your argument because it certainly secures the strength of your writing and helps feul ideas. Also refrain from repeating yourself; it weakens your argument/point a lot. In the beginning of the paragraph you said “White people knew that lynching wasn’t stopping colored people from sleeping with their women and continued any ways.” And then towards the end you said “It clearly showed that it wouldn’t stop from happening no matter what was done to their race.”(Fragment by the way). You can sort of say the same thing sometimes as an advantage to your writing but you should try to bring new examples into the picture or paraphrase to the point where the reader doesn’t ask themselves “Didn’t I just read that”. Overall great potential for a successful argument.
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